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Flat (Free verse) by Skamper

every hollow air filled dip on my crinkled cardboard form a never ending pattern tiny waves shallow and bland unrelieved by even the faintest sigh tastes of beige the fight - I picked with you didn’t have the same fire my heart refused to beat any faster and my mouth – well it lacked bite so I just drove too far with the tank on empty

INTRANSIT 4-Nov-07/5:38 AM
Part of me likes the incongruity. The other part doesn't, 'natch. Hmmm. I know cardboard burns hella fast, and burning gasoline and fire in the second--

The more I look at it the more I like it as is. Is the cardboard only there to describe you ?




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