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Her name was Marjorie Harper (Free verse) by Caducus

I died a blur in half moon glasses her eyes reflected the blitz. I never told the nurse till nine, holding her in television blue it was all she remembered. A nurse turned her bed fresh linen for fresh dead and the sky of Marigolds were plucked from a china vase headfirst into polythene. Salaried pats from a light hand, carbon dioxide aplologies, the night nurse offered a glacier mint the chaplain offered the Lord I took none, just the vase and her velour dressing gown with her scent of April

Musicman 24-Oct-07/10:27 AM
As a new member to this site this is the best I have read so far. It appears you have a creative flair but please spell check your "aplologies". Also, if this rockmage person gave it a 10 does he not see a couple of technical issues with this poem, since he sets himself up as a critic of some knowledge on poesie? That is if he has REAL knowledge. But I have read a few of his Senryus. Although a few are interesting, I do not see any prodigious SKILL.




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