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The Friendship Storm (Free verse) by x0lovelylarnx0

On with life our friends will go Embarking on a new road Fluffy White Storm clouds cluster in the sky Blocking the sun from shining down on their lives Love hides in the dark rain The Lovers remain separate as the storm reigns Lighting Shatters the heart in half Thunder thrashes out on it's soul mate The storm blows over Leaving in a rush to tear another lost heart into shreds The sun pours it's love and warmth onto the Victim's wretched luck The paths connect back at the start Now these lovers must never part

Skamper 14-Oct-07/7:44 PM
Ok...you have an idea in your head of what you want to write and it seems to me you use terms that are overused and very familiar to what the public will see. Instead of thinking about what YOU see, you create the scene that's easily recognisible but totally worn out. If you write just for the recognition then you need to relax and find your own style - because this is fairly generic.




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