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Sylvania Wilderness (Free verse) by jessicazee

I'm always paddling in front of you in the lake, in the canoe, I dig, cut the water, you steer us in J-flits, your oar angles us to the first spit before our site through the branches. There won't be any bears, you said, but I heard him first, that black cub running races along the shore. You did the right thing, acting bigger than yourself and loud, and all night in the tent I kept holding you tighter in case the mother bear found our scent, your Old Spice, my store-brand Pantene.

http://mulberryfairy 24-Aug-07/3:09 PM
I like the last line; their scents are a cliche in themselves, pre-packaged and all, and I like that you refused to acknowledge their other scent ingredients. How cliche is it,really, when perhaps 25% of the population use those products? When is it cliche, and when is it just statistically accurate?




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