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intricate babbling (Haiku) by eunique

you turbulent heart give this fragile body rest a stone's throw away

richa 31-Jul-07/1:54 PM
Haiku don't tend to have many syllables to play with so I would lose 'you'. As haiku are supposed to have two intersecting images I would say third line should read 'a stone thrown' to seperate it from the turbulent heart fragile body image.




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