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When women tickle our pinna with their tongues, they leave cool stains like tree shade to duck under when the world comes hot and constant like breath.

lmp 5-Jul-07/7:55 AM
i agree that cochlea had a tendency to make for squeamish feelings, but pinna falls a little flat. i think it is the reduction from 3 to 2 syllables.
perhaps try "auriculae". it is a little more erotic sounding than "auricle" (which is a synonym for pinna) and it actually adds a syllable, but it works well in this case.

i would also suggest changing "women" to "lovers". my guess is that anyone can use that sort of shade when things get steamy.

understanding now your perspective (as a truck driver), this is a great sentiment.




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