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light [edited] (Haiku) by lmp

yellow-pink rind fades next to morning light's luster upon your soft skin

Skamper 29-Jun-07/6:22 PM
I can see the image you are trying to create, and the contrast - but, find I would be lost if it wasn't for the comments above. So, maybe you need to put the fruit in the title somehow because I keep wanting to change 'rind' to 'ring' as if it's a typo...





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