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Summer Festival (Free verse) by Christof

During a day and a half of wind and rain There's no point bringing the washing in And the loose-limbed shirts and trouser legs The clinging bras and flapping skirts Slick with water like sweaty skin Dance a blissful drunken shrug And will not stop till the sun floods in.

Dovina 29-Jun-07/3:28 PM
Either omit the one period or punctuate as prudent. I suggest the latter. Try omitting "and the" in L3, and "the" in L4.




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