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F Log-On (Free verse) by Skamper

single-handed typers shielded snipers firing into the midst of the one eyed tryst between machine and man drawn to the force of cyber whores clawing and spewing while cyber-men are tuning to watch... yes - she sold her soul rolled sweated and panted for your gold cunning - she is nothing a micro chipped whip used to strip your mind from your cash - there are many traps in her smiling face set hard in cyber space

Ranger 21-Jun-07/5:12 AM
What exactly are you F-Logging?

Make line 3 straight iambs ('fire into the midst') and perhaps the 'rolled sweated and panted' line wants rhythmic tweaking. Dovina's right about the rap-ness of this.

Good poeme.




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