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save a class now (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation

Roger presented his project to the class. Pythons shrunk down to a size they could be held in dixie cups. Don't mix it up pythons in dixie cups. The whole class began to freak out and scream. Girls stood on desks and the teacher threw a paperweight at roger. C'mon boy, dodge her, paperweights at roger. It struck his left arm and he dropped what he held. the pythons were scattered like worms along the floor. And they screamed some more, the kids saw the snakes on the floor. And roger was weeping, the teacher was sobbing and all thirty students noticed something was hopping through the window now. A weird looking racoon hopped through the window now. And the racoon began to gobble down the snakes, threw a few in a blender, pinapple python shakes. All were then happy, 'cept roger's folks and the teach. she is in jail now. The racoon moved to the beach.

sca 6-Jun-07/1:51 AM
I might have to favouritise you so I know where to go when I can come back (whence I'm not cramming for exams).

I like it. It's cheeky. On a more formal note I think it detereorated from "And roger was weeping," but I wouldn't change anything if it'll mean taking away from the general feel.

Haha, awesome.

=> Jess




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