lmp5 Jun 2007

I caught on immediately that you may be writing a series... are they all going to be "over-the-hill" plots, or will things change by the time the great prarie land opens before those handlebars? (not really asking for spoilers.)

i agree with Ranger; this does seem a bit overstated and bulky for the subject. there are several parts that are awkward to read and follow.

the closing stanza, while it is clear what the intent was, could be misread as richa pointed out. the dog did not come out for a loss, so perhaps it should read:
"which loss was greater - that which he sought
or that which he refused."

i do look forward to more in this series and it seems you have a long road ahead if the pace that has been set stays even.