Sasha20 Apr 2007
You rhymed kiss and bliss. That alone earns you the great award of "cliché." You also refer to bliss as heavenly. This earns the award of "overt cliché." You use absolutely no novel imagery or language or even display the slightest awareness that a poem is a form of artwork.
In other words, this is a bad poem for just about every reason a poem can be bad.
-2- for effort