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Memories (Free verse) by RION12

Always sad. Never happy. I wish I didn't have memories. Memories of my past. Things I hate. Play in my head. Make me scared Make me hate. They will not escape. I wish I didn't make memories. Even if there good. Every memory has a bad ending for me. It's never all good or all bad. It's both like always. I don't want to go forward in life. I can't go back. So what can I do about these memories I have.

cheese.doodles 8-Apr-07/8:54 AM
Oh, poor you, whiny baby. Look, this poem is rambly and boring with no metaphor, poor rythm and I think you break the sympathetic contract in your first two lines. Remember to show, don't tell.




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