jessicazee25 Mar 2007

I mean starting each line in that stanza with "the", "of" (twice), "in", etc. Your intended statements deserve the implied understanding that your audience is literate. Translation: your great writing is still poetry in sentences, in fact your really great writing! For example:

throw them behind the mind of one
with shoulder-shrug cares
who watches the lacerations of the she --
stripped bare in declaration of paper
cut wearing --
lacking depth but stinging all the same

That was fun.