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Grab Out For J. Christ! (Free verse) by Sing4Jesus!

Are you yearning to grasp eagerly with both your hands The shining road to the heavenly safety of the Lord? Yes! Yes! Yes! You should have a try! Yes! Yes! Yes! Or are you lost in sin, with a great big fat capital S? But our Lord was far worse-off than I ever could have been The sort of treatment He had scares me a big lot it was so mean To see Him dead was his enemies' only wicked plan And also they wanted all who belonged to His heavenly clan. This proves to me without no doubt, that just When you pray with your heart and soul and all your trust The Lord will send a message to you in different ways Within a short moment or two or in several days. I am really willing to grasp gratefully with both my hands The gleaming path to the heavenly wonder of Lord Jesus! Yes! Yes! Yes! I will have a try! Yes! Yes! Yes! I am not lost in sin, with a great big fat capital S! Each and every event of your worthless life will surely show How your life for Jesu Christ the God can quickly grow If you will only ask Him on your grovelling knees Reach out and prove Himself, say yes, yes please! Just tell Him, "O lead me on O my lovely God, help me up I am all Yours Jesus and the Holy Ghost! You can sign me up!" Yes! Yes! Yes! I am totally up for Jesus in Heaven Let me say I love Him not one time but six or seven! And all who do not believe will get crushed to death! They will be smashed to bits and will run out of breath!

mikeeb 14-Mar-07/11:43 AM
Your motives behind this poem are not clear to the reader, or at least not this one. There were times it seemed like a satire, especially in the fourth stanza, which unfortunately devolved into an exercise in Dr. Seuss wordplay. Other times your choice of language is deadly serious, leaving me confused.

I won't say 'horrendous' or 'shite' but I would suggest asking yourself why you wrote this poem. You must have had a goal in mind - don't hide it from the reader.

Take care.




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