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Her Mitts (Free verse) by Nepanthe

My mitts are hermits, their land is each hand, knitted, well fitted, bold in the cold. A hand's haven between action, brings warmth and satisfaction. Comfortable within my skin, I'll remove my mittens for my kin. My hands may brave the Winter's groan, for the friend without mitts of her own.

Ranger 13-Mar-07/2:33 PM
What I had in mind was a rhythm similar to the one you use in the first stanza (it's okay, you can despair at me if you like. I'm terrible at workshopping). The first two lines go like this:

da-DA da-DA-da, da-DA da-da-DA
DA-da, da-DA-da, DA-da-da DA

Does that make it any clearer?




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