[mojo]14 Sep 2002

Yes, that's what I thought, I was just testing...but still, I don't know..leaking...makes the narrator appear as an object rather than a person, it's very dehumanising. Maybe that's the effect you were after, but it looks a little as though you were just trying to avoid "crying" etc. 'cos you find the "easier" choice of word "amateur". The beginning of the piece is very subtle, maybe a punch of plain old ordinary words at the end would give it a "kick". Anyway, of all the words you could have used...leaking....hmmmm. Then again it got me interested so what the hell. It's nit-picking at best. Nice work.