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Around 4am at this time of the year (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

Daybreak arrives and I am awake to witness it. The solstice is soon and the time is inconvenient. Because this is the darkest time to be awake and the fear is at its strongest I have to find a mental activity to distract me from the light. Oddly this is supplied by watching the sun begin to move and for the trees to become lit. So by seeing the garden lighten outside the bedroom I am able to stave off the fear of the moment caused by the feeling of being here at this time in the light.

Nicholas Jones 16-Feb-07/4:16 PM
Blimey, that's a lot of critiquing you've been doing in one day.

It's not about convoluted language. It's about wanting to be able to not think. But to require a mental activity to stop yourself thinking. Because otherwise the horror comes.

Looking at the stuff I've written there are many poems about not being to sleep; it's a subject that means a lot to me. It's why I'm writing this past midnight having got home from a gig; because I'm scared when I do go to bed I might be awake for hours yet. So this poem is about waking up, it's summer, it gets light early, intently watching the changing colours of the sky as the sun rises distracts me from that four am sense of emptiness.

I'm not saying it's a perfect poem, far from it, but the horror and the terror isn't directly in it because it's a poem about avoiding that rather than confronting it.




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