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Ode to a Pimple-Lyric Spawned by Phalkon's Greasy Face. (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

Silly emotions have flooded my hormone filled head so much that I now wish to be very very dead; but my grip on the .36 is slipping due to my tears, hampering my attempt to fill my cranium with lead-- so instead, I'll wail till blood comes out y'ears in the form of a bad lyric you'll wish y'never read.

xxx 10-Feb-07/4:49 PM
'so much so' reads a little better as rhythm perhaps, but you are far better at poetry than I. I can but bow.




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