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self-suffocation (Lyric) by Phalkon

stuck inside my own head no way to break free i scream 'til my lungs implode no one listens... i'm screaming a tune that no one hears i'm falling apart, drowning in tears i can't hold my grip my head begins to rip i turn myself inside out and look at myself in the sunlight the bright burns my eyes my eyes too dry to cry i'm screaming a tune that no one hears i'm falling apart, drowning in tears i can't hold my grip my head begins to rip i tendons tear apart i feel my beating heart i can see my muscles ache i feel about to break i'm screaming a tune that no one hears i'm falling apart, drowning in tears i can't hold my grip my head begins to rip i'm screaming a tune that no one hears i'm falling apart, drowning in tears i can't hold my grip my head begins to rip (the whispering begins... (i know it's that time again... (the light begins to fade... (and everything's still the same...) i'm screaming a tune that no one hears i'm falling apart, drowning in tears i can't hold my grip my head begins to rip

SupremeDreamer 9-Feb-07/12:40 PM
"i tendons tear apart"

Eh? What in holy fuck is with the I? Is it a disease? Did you somehow fool yourself into thinking it was necessary, like you convinced yourself that sharing this pimple-lyric to the world was a brilliant undertaking?

Allow me to compact this whole thing, though I can not preserve its claim to being a lyric in the process:

Silly emotions have flooded my hormone filled head
so much that I now wish to be very very dead;
but my grip on the .36 is slipping due to my tears,
hampering my attempt to fill my cranium with lead--
so instead, I'll wail till blood comes out y'ears
in the form of a bad lyric you'll wish y'never read.

Not bad eh? In fact, I think I'll post this. Oh, and heres a resounding zero. Do us all a favor, smoke some weed, and find something that inspires better creativity... OK? Or slit your wrists, you know, whatever works.




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