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David at the Firing (Free verse) by coldiron

Warily approach the golden boy, For in certain sunlight, he casts a dark shadow. He sits by the side of the throwing wheel--whirled droplets of clay spatter his feet. His hands, soaking wet, changing, shaping-- The pot Rising above the frenzied wheel-- Finished, To take his ashes.

Dovina 2-Feb-07/1:38 PM
I would not have got it from the poem. That's a bad thing. Suggest shaping the image a while longer on the wheel.




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