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Journey To The Centre Of The Loom (Ode) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

Born of oil, wrought in flame, A beast inside a wooden frame. Braced with steel, wrapped in mesh, An edifice of woven flesh. And in its looming shadow strode The men who marched the woollen road. Vats of dye, reels of thread, Cascading from its silhouette. Smoking pyres, a beating drum, Black against the blood-red sun. And through its gaping trumpets strode The men who marched the woollen road. Swollen balls, a severed hand, Dolloped from its weaving gland. Droppings here, droppings there, Basking in the brownly air. And through this wicker squalor strode The men who marched the woollen road. Branding irons, a bitter cry, An extra lash for every lie. Made to harvest, made to reap, Made to sew, then made to weep. And trapped inside this silken womb, The dead return to tend the Loom.

Dr Peter Douglas 28-Jan-07/3:33 PM
As someone who is new to this site it is good to see a poem that is in a different style from what appears to be the favoured Free style.
Many years ago i visited a working loom, albeit a preserved one but a very interesting experience. The clouds of cotton dust that choked you as you walked around, the noise of the machine the complex simplicity of the machine and the flying wheels cogs and loom that ended in this beautiful creation of silk at the far end, all of which you have captured in this ode, which is a creative piece on a part of most countries history, but certainly from my own country england the social history involved with these machines created a new way of thinking and reaction that led to many social changes that are still relevant today.
Very enjoyable piece that i will read again and again.




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