Dovina20 Jan 2007

To say that the story is “a little thin” is generous indeed. Perhaps if I’d named the ship Pooranchor, instead of Poor Anchor, the analogy and silliness would pop out. Maybe it did anyway.

I love the "The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald" and would love to write a ballad form like it, but first I’d want something serious to write about, second more talent. And you’re right, it relates more to rats than people, unlike Zodiac’s Valentine 2 (about Captain Cook) a good poem on a serious subject.

The prologue could be dumped. It’s supposed to show that what we now call artificial intelligence might, in 2075, be smart enough to decipher what’s really going on.

Sorry it’s too anthropomorphic, with glad rats, amiable ship and all – just part of the silliness. Thanks for the helpful comment.