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Swimming (Free verse) by [mojo]

I swam into the sun, Once upon a time. Once within a tide, Once when having fun, Once when deeds were done, When stories were created, And not just being told, Tattered and worn memories related, Regurgitated By us now we're too old, And the water feels too cold. But I swear I swam into the sunrise, With the taste of salt and beer, With the smell of brine and fear, With the sound of splashing cheer, With five o'clock bravado, I could have touched it's face, But the water's so uninviting now, And time's a lonely place.

[mojo] 13-Sep-02/11:44 AM
I welcome all comments, good or bad. However this latest offering from Bachus is simply indecipherable. I would appreciate an elaboration/translation. Or would that be a waste of time? What did Christof have to do with it? I'm afraid the reference to a tuxedo goes way over my head. Maybe I'm stupid, or maybe Bachus was trying to sound so clever that he confused himself. If you don't like one of my poems please tell me. Even better offer some advice, but please, keep this sort of nonsense to yourself.




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