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Self Portrait (Free verse) by Dovina

An artist dips a brush into his soul as the Potter fingers clay to model His. Clad in kindness and a contemplative hat, an optimistic likeness stands, Tarnished by the process, but not beyond repair.

LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jan-07/9:26 PM
I like this... but wonder why you capitalized Potter and His.
Perhaps as a reference to God or The creator? If so, then I wonder what/who the painter is?
I think, if the God reference was on purpose, I like it without the reference, as it speaks to the differences and sameness of creators of art. But the descriptions are very tactile, but with a God reference it makes the potter and clay so much less tactile and rather illusive.
That said, whichever way it is meant to be, it is pretty good and the last two lines very good.




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