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Dream Grower (Free verse) by Enkidu

Grow a dream and I'll finagle it from out your ear, and give you a subtle smirk. Grow a dream and the years of planting from my eyes will coax petals to bloom from your smile. Grow a dream weakly and my fingers will drown it: my digits fluttering as soft rain where the dawn is fleshy and brilliant. Grow this dream for me, strongly, and for fortune's sake, your dream-vines will twist and choke my own until we wake.

Dovina 4-Jan-07/4:56 PM
At first I thought you were in tune with the writer of Hebrews: “Let us consider how we may spur one another on toward love.” But the choking twist in the last verse has a sinister tone that sounds self-sacrificial. If you want the coaxing and stimulation of the first part, then consider a softer ending. Overall I like it.




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