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Spots of Gray (Lyric) by Miggy

How much is the difference between Shades of dirty and shades of clean I don’t know the meaning of perfection I do know some significance of direction Yet there will always be so many struggles When we think we cannot make one fumble But people are allowed to make mistakes As long as they stand up and have the will to stay If wishes were always granted on the spot Then worlds would be tired and left to rot We all are special with these spots of gray There will always be another day Is 2400 or 1600 or 32 the answer Wasn’t one the only one that mattered? This place cannot be filled with failures in life When failures are what make us get up and stride Imagine dying for not being society’s right That thought was lived out before our sight In passions to have the complete flawlessness We eliminate those who were pert of the mess If wishes were always granted on the spot Then worlds would be tired and left to rot We all are special with these spots of gray There will always be another day So if we must bend over for what has been dealt We then live are lives crying over that spilt And if whatever was done if left to spoil Then we will never learn to get out of our turmoil If wishes were always granted on the spot Then worlds would be tired and left to rot We all are special with these spots of gray There will always be another day

Paul S 4-Jan-07/4:12 AM
This is good--I know this is a lyric and it's hard to critique without the music, but to me the rhythm is off in a couple of places--good work though.




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