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Chord before the crescendo (Free verse) by Caducus

Echoes of death briskly marched her percussion anthem slowed and I stroked my broken instrument Like Chopin’s viola. Echoes of her life stopped I shook like Harp strings, Kissed her pursed silent flute Where breath crafts music no more. Echoes of a church choir sang My boxed instrument burned. A stranger in a dress spoke of you Then I described you without words, Through woodwind and echoes And you returned one last time In the chord before the crescendo.

Dovina 14-Dec-06/1:28 PM
The first two verses are great. I lost you in “My boxed instrument burned,” (think you could omit it) but the rest of Verse 3 is good, and the last line is great.




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