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Lost In It (Free verse) by PoeticXTC

Surrounded at every end No windows to breath No doors to leave. Or Is it that I don't want to Living a life of despair and regret The only way out is up. Living a life for where there is no life Everything in life is corrupt. Is it just me, or is fate calling. This life is no luck, it's a disgrace Sit back to wonder what's to be dealt next There is too little space misplaced. In one's heart truths will be held. Your truths, my truths, all truths are consealed There is no space for disgrace No time for regret No need to despair There is hope in a heart and love will prevail.

Dovina 13-Dec-06/9:38 PM
Way too non-directional and unclear. I think you need definite statements, not wishy-washy expressions.




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