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Cloche. (Free verse) by howl

The subway; a cloche to beggars late evening, not one lit fire like seen in the dumps. The bell of an unattended tram peals, a boy pulling the rope to hear its reaction. The policeman points, his torch beam picking up little, he is happy. Later the beat girl hands out bread to the rattling voices of old men.

Dovina 10-Dec-06/5:11 PM
No period after "closed." Comma after "fire." Heck with it, all punctuation can go. "Like is done in the dumps" -> "as in the dumps" or somesuch.




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