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Particle Deceleration (Free verse) by MacFrantic

One big rock and all that's left is agony, the instigator, and a crushing silence: doom. So too you grew, and dissipate. The shadow, our friend, comforts us in this womb; our metal grave. In the concentrated calm, beneath the sun-stained highway, shouts rise through the cracks. Life is impossible. The seatbelt straps are acrimonious restraints. Window shivs apply their embrace: I've perspired blood since we landed. So don't cry to me, you venomous, incessant defeatist. I shall forever be the better off without the wailing.

Dovina 9-Dec-06/6:23 AM
The last two lines seem unsupported by the rest. I think "doom" is too telling; we get the point without it. Otherwise good.




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