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Sonnet 5 (The Second Deluge) (Sonnet) by Schlinkey

He grieves the loss of perfect innocence; The nascent truth a herald's cries of war, For born into a world of violence, The infant quickly stands upon life's shore. Supplied and armed with faith and clad in hate, Evincing nothing more than broken hope; The gem of unity is left to fate. "How can we vanquish evil of such scope?" He ponders this, as suddenly his tea Blots out most every article of blight, A purging flood he failed to truly see. He does, however, feel a bit contrite. The coming of a new Deluge is near Perchance it's time for man to disappear.

Schlinkey 2-Dec-06/7:42 PM
I've understood as much :) That you don't really like the form that is. I find it refreshing writing sonnets though, so I'll keep at it! (for a time at least). As to perfect innocence. I'm not sure, but innocence in itself is a term loosely used. Perfect innocence though, that would like the epitome of the very concept. Then again, when I decide to write stuff like this, it will come out kinda, well, "ugh" for some. :D

Thanks, as always, for your thoughts. It's neat when someone disagrees with you!




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