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Sonnet 2 (Eulogy for a clerk) (Sonnet) by Schlinkey

"Attend, my dear old friend" I said to him; This grumbling, wistful man so stained with ink, "Your scornful view on things is far too grim; The ship you are on board is bound to sink." He raised his almond eyes and looked at me; Such vast and bitter pools of smothered sparks, "You know quite well how I detest the sea." Forever one to spout his snide remarks, He sighed at last, a deep and tortured sound, "Indeed today might be my very last; If so; should I not stand and hold my ground? The line is sadly none but mine to cast." That day he died, my friend the clerk; Upon his face, the same old smirk.

Schlinkey 1-Dec-06/8:18 PM
True that. I switched on purpose though. Felt that tetrameter would do perfectly in the couplet :)

I don't really agree with scornful and grim being that similar. But I do, however, agree with you saying I've used some words to make the pentameter work. If I wanted to write modern stuff, I'd stick to wishy washy free verse, just jamming with words. Seeing as I'm not really skilled doing that, I'll keep fiddling with these older forms. That's the thing with writing in strict forms, it's not easy making it all slippery easy greasy to read. All over, I'm content though. If you have any suggestions as to make it better, I'll be happy to hear em :)




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