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Sonnet 2 (Eulogy for a clerk) (Sonnet) by Schlinkey

"Attend, my dear old friend" I said to him; This grumbling, wistful man so stained with ink, "Your scornful view on things is far too grim; The ship you are on board is bound to sink." He raised his almond eyes and looked at me; Such vast and bitter pools of smothered sparks, "You know quite well how I detest the sea." Forever one to spout his snide remarks, He sighed at last, a deep and tortured sound, "Indeed today might be my very last; If so; should I not stand and hold my ground? The line is sadly none but mine to cast." That day he died, my friend the clerk; Upon his face, the same old smirk.

Ranger 27-Nov-06/1:57 PM
Another very readable sonnet, although again I'm unconvinced by the initial internal rhyming - it sets up an expectation that isn't carried through. It needs punctuation after each quote in order to satisfy the grammar nazi, and over here 'clerk' is pronounced 'clark' which screws up your final rhyme, but that's not really an issue. 'Almond eyes' is really good, conjures up cyanide connotations (works well with the death), and the last two lines are well worked.




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