poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on In a Church by Sasha.

Dovina11 Nov 2006

It's a good poem, I suppose, at least a good poem in translation. Couldn't you improve the meter though, and not lose the meaning. i.e.:

Star candles
in the people’s hands,
a bit of tallow
for Madonna.
Each a gift,
a silent prayer,
a secret keeping
holy honor.