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Like and Unlike (Free verse) by Christof

How like an old man. Midstride, dead, He topples His face as mottled As a butterfly's wing. Be distracted as the pavements sing For the rain Plays the slatted drain Like a xylophone. Consider the skin tone Now brittle as chalk, The stamp of his walk From his muscles erased Like a lyric unphrased. Note the dumb head Note the wedding ring As the unknown dully meets the unknown.

Christof 13-Sep-02/3:31 AM
'Dully' is an adverb - the unknown meets the unknown in a dully way. It's a good word aurally, but I admit it looks a bit peculiar on paper.(or screen). Also I know what you mean about moths, but I liked the implied fragility of the butterfly wing that for me the moth doesn't have. What an abstruse distinction to have to make. And we have some very mottled and drab butterflies in England.




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