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Your Eyes (Free verse) by Dovina

A fence, wandering across the land, along some ancient line, encloses and discloses, relates in its purpose, to other things, not itself— what it keeps and what it keeps out, the boundaries it proclaims, the openings it allows. Having walked the public side, and peeked in, I’m searching for the gate.

half.italian 18-Oct-06/2:45 AM
Great poem. It flows incredibly well for me until the last line. At first read I thought the reference to self bothered me, but now I'm not so sure. It just doesn't seem to fit with the rest.

Honestly, I don't understand (as other posters mention) how your work varies in quality so much. Farewell Kind Lover was another diamond, but most of the stuff in between I haven't liked very much. Anyway, this is great.




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