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Crappy (Free verse) by drnick

Light rain slides down the window Sky painted a sloppy gray And if you fool yourself You'll walk with smile on your face Slimy rock and dirt your path Not a friend along the way You know not to kid yourself In fear of looking lame All you can imagine is some life So boring, sober, sane No need to kill yourself If existence has gone to Frey Sure you could rewrite the world Would that make you happy? And if you'd fool yourself You'll find you became too sappy

drnick 17-Oct-06/8:05 AM
the final rhyme was meant to be too direct, as I thought it would be "sappy" to end that way.

the rewriting of the world line just means this person could really make a difference in the world, change things.




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