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Pump the Guns (Free verse) by oddgreenout

feeling it the burn it it burns like a furnace pump it and then pump it a hiss like dry steam it burns oh how it burns it makes muscle so pump it

Ranger 13-Oct-06/3:55 AM
Nice idea, could do with a little more punctuation.

Line one - 'then'?




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