drnick12 Oct 2006

Yes! You know I love this one, how could I not? I agree that your title could be better, but it's just a title. I also agree with nyp on the first stanza, but I would change it to:

For she left me and (she/then) wandered off
While I sat there in despair
For she left me and (she/then) wandered off
And never told me where

And, again, agreeing with nyp (guy is giving some tastey advice), the last line should be "With no road back to me". Other than that I like every fucking letter of this poem. nice!