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Gilded Lily (Free verse) by drnick

Forgive my eyes for they not see your gilded image in mine memory. Forgive this tongue for it does speak those wicked words of honesty. Forgive a mind for it must be the knife I shove right through to thee. Forgive your heart it tends to bleed with socia-motional inadequacies. Forgive these feet as they must leave and the rest to follow appropriately. Forgive the path for it not heed upon reception of indolent apologies. Forgive yourself for you not need an ounce of common respectability. "Forgive Lily" as she will plea with innocent mask dishonesty.

nypoet22 12-Oct-06/6:01 PM
to have the word "thee" followed shortly thereafter by the word "socio-emotional" shows the inconsistency of language use here. every work has some inconsistencies, but the language and grammar of this one is really all over the place.




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