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People vs Corps. (Free verse) by Jack Diamond

We are the sensitive one's one's who insist the truth be revealed, Not the one's who polish and shine so hard the enamel comes off We are the one's with real concerns survival, common sense, equality, You want a fight well you have nothing fighting yourself fighting a stanger give it up Thrones of stones glistening light that signals S.O.S. -help me I'm pretending So if you want to pretend play a board game you buy at Target not the game playing people at the board meeting Public domain will be open again along with your empty chamber between your bones.

Ranger 12-Oct-06/10:48 AM
Like the play of words in the title - corps/corpse. Could turn this into a zombie poem if you tried, still carrying the same message. Typo throughout - "ones" ("'" for possessive or compounding). I think there should be a comma in line 21 between 'me' and 'I'm'. 'Buy at Target'? Is there a pun there that I'm missing? Decent write though.




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