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untitled (Free verse) by harryparatestes

i have liquid gardens filled with forgotten tears and painful memories its on the outside of infinity just past the road of missed opportunity's thats where i go plant my aching heart when its broken,shattered,and torn apart theres a devil in every bush a joker in every tree and angels on the breeze that weep for me its in the state of depression or self suggestion whatever suits you best

Fugazi 3-Oct-06/2:39 PM
Intersting .. A couple of things that contradict, which has been pointed out already. Apart from that I think its pretty darn good.
Could be the start (or end) of a longer piece and I'd like to see you expand onthe theme.




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