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Colors of Me (Other) by MissUnderstood

My emotions could paint you a rainbow. My feelings have much to say. My heart is red, my mood is blue. My thoughts are sort of gray. A kaleidoscope of colors. Raining brightly from within. Swirling round in circles. Trying to find where to begin. Yellow, green, and purple. Pink, brown, and even teal. All make a part of who I am. The part of me that's real.

Ranger 30-Sep-06/6:39 AM
Yeah, I quite liked this. 'My heart is red, my mood is blue' is overused - but following it with 'My thoughts are sort of gray' makes it work, in my opinion. I'd alter the last line (it's very Linkin Park-y, whereas the rest is a bit more delicate). Keep writing rhythmic poetry (this is good), originality will come in time.




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