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Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) (Free verse) by Ranger

I took you there; you hated it – the steep uncertain climes (and sloping glades of grain) which turned from diamanté lens to drear in clicking like an oaken farmhouse door. -It was no stream of sun – but skewing cloud And no-one seemed to know quite how it came to be so dark, or why it stayed so long The landscape threatened violence that day- as solar flowers threw their manes around with total disregard; the screaming slaves in chain-gang rows. A million beating fists would shatter stone and scatter glass in heaps beneath your feet, along the path you trod. You shut your eyes; it passed before you woke I told you it had left a ribbon track- the scent of water in an earthen pitch, and lizards leaping like a joyful king. But still you watched the crackling, heavy orb, like insects passed too soon for storm or grace an eye cast downwards – fractured morning ice of hurricane and tempest’s broken tide.

Ranger 22-Sep-06/3:24 PM
Heh, you know I appreciate your lengthy comments - they show you've spent time reading my poems, which in turn inflates my already-oversized ego ;-)

My geography sucks big time (I barely even know where I am half the time) and I've never been to America, so I'm clueless. The only body of water I know anything about is Lake Superior, and that's only from hearing about it on an old Gordon Lightfoot song. You know the one - 'The Wreck Of The Edmund Fitzgerald'.

The father of a friend of mine has a canoe/kayak-making business, actually - we have a nicely scenic canal a few minutes from where I am which is pretty popular with the waterbabies, and also cyclists. I went along there the other day, actually, aiming to make 20 miles in a couple of hours but was thwarted by the Dark Lord of Burstyre about 6 miles from home. So, stranded in the middle of nowhere, I decided to act in the spirit of all great and epic quests, and struck out for the nearest pub.

And, of course, good luck! Do let me know how you get on (is this a major competition?) I expect to hear the clink of a fresh gold medallion ringing in your next poem ;-)




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