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I Have, Because I Am (Free verse) by flock

I have walked for twelve days straight With a sprained ankle. At the time, I carried 18 kg on my back and I was struck by heat exhaustion and diarrhea. I have clung to the side of a mountain, Hoping that a small clump of grass, Which kept me from falling 400m to my death, Did not break and thus spell out my demise. I have crept along a 800m-high precipice, Wondering if I should carry on to the top and Risk falling at any moment. What a wonderful view I saw from the top though. I have jumped across a crevice, and in doing so, Saw how close I was from meeting my fate. I have seen others do likewise And felt their relief as well. I have crawled in the dirt many times, Hoping that I could escape what had befallen me. I have stood on mountain-tops and Looked out as far as I could in every direction. I have looked over three mountain ranges to see the horizon, But saw only a vague haze. I have watched clouds gather and Fall like a thunderous cough onto a dry earth. I have seen birds build nests. I have seen plants grow Between small cracks in the rock. I have watched ants wake up and Start a new day of hard work, On a sunday. I have heard ants chewing on wheat stalks. I have seen a spider weave a web with Skill and intent unrivalled by any human. I have heard the birds waking at dawn. I have watched the moon fall into the sea. Twice. I have looked up at the stars. The very same stars that Explorers before me have used to navigate the seas. I have navigated through A mountain shrouded in mist. I have seen human traits in animals. I have seen animals in some humans. I have seen someone hate another. I have seen another love someone else. I have nurtured. I have destroyed. I have built towers taller than houses. I have been given a lot. I have had a lot taken from me. I have been the center of attention. I have been shunned. I have cracked under pressure. I have prevailed under worse. I have been tired. I have spoken to strangers. I have been robbed. I have had my self-worth broken down to nothing And then built up again to be stronger. I have done the same for others. I have watched as my mind slowly drifts away, Only to grab hold of it at the last minute. I have pushed my mind and body to the limit several times. I have done evil things, of these i am not proud. I have people I care for. I have people who care for me. I have made friends. I have been alone. I have laughed. I have cried. I have lived I have, Because I am.

nightowl 22-Sep-06/7:53 AM
True that. What authority then do we have to criticise the poet's work? Who am I to destroy his writings and his dreams? That kinda is what that other quote I put at the end means to me. Criticism is usely harsh and alot of the times very rude and injurious. It all comes down to the way you say something. If you feel you have to criticise someone then do it in a good way, a positive way. Why make somene else feel bad?

"It's about the poet's perspective? That's debatable." Yup it seems to be. hehe. Is it not the poet who wrote the story? Who else's perspective would it be then? The only time it might be different is if the poet is out to make poeple like his work through following a set formula that works and then you just fill in the words. And Im not say that's easy to do, if that's how it's done.

"But this is a poem - and therefore it needs to be presented in an effective way." Continuing on the previous statement, maybe I'm not knowledgable enough in the art of poetry but when I write something, its something that's on my mind and I write it. Alot of the time it comes out in rhythmical form but that's just the way I write. Is there a set way to write a poem? Maybe then I shouldn't call my writings poetry. I might be wrong about this whole then.

Hey, ur no sod, just someone with a different opinion to me and I also dig hearing other people's views. Isn't that an awesome facet of life? I believe (this might also cause another branch of discussion) that when we are no longer in this world, dead that is, things are alot different and there is much more congruity. ')

Have a awesome weekend and thanks to Flock for allowing us to use his space to entertain ourselves. We are therefore we can. ')

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