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don't touch me 2 (Free verse) by elderking

while hanging there in midair, fingers startled still with his demand, curling now like cowards, they sought the shelter of her hand. shame then, laced them tightly, into fists from willful hand, which she lost in deepest pockets; she hasn't touched him once since then.

elderking 21-Sep-06/3:10 PM
pete-she had enjoyed touching him and did so in an almost unconcious manner. he on the other hand thought each touch held a hidden agenda; he told her to stop touching him so much...so she did.
one of my biggest problems writing is dropping the reader into the middle of the unknown assuming clarity when often there is none. Thanks for you thoughts, Pete




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