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Week End Justification (Free verse) by half.italian

Bones rubber a bit loose ends defray mind eases Sordid pleasures fly tipsy on my tongue but there is no one to hear Knowing that hollow ears would only see words, I will be Kong King of Thought.

nypoet22 17-Sep-06/3:40 AM
i like the use of rubber as a verb, and the last two lines. knowing that hollow ears would only see words seems incomplete to me, like it wants a grounding image to connect the middle of the poem and its end. perhaps something about a skyscraper and airplanes?




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