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weather poem part 8: stating the obvious (Other) by nypoet22

Everyone mentions the weather Sweats out their pores when the thermostat rises The waking from a morning sleep Each day fighting the finality of it All screaming to wake the others To capture the strolling of earth and heaven Tumbled like clothes in the dryer Turning, these moments well up tears in my eyes the corner of my bloodshot eye from there i catch a rare glance at yours, downcast

zodiac 15-Sep-06/2:58 PM
No, I'm afraid not. You might just save 'thermostat' for another poem. Or find a way to make it more sensible and evocative.




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