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weather poem part 8: stating the obvious (Other) by nypoet22

Everyone mentions the weather Sweats out their pores when the thermostat rises The waking from a morning sleep Each day fighting the finality of it All screaming to wake the others To capture the strolling of earth and heaven Tumbled like clothes in the dryer Turning, these moments well up tears in my eyes the corner of my bloodshot eye from there i catch a rare glance at yours, downcast

Ranger 14-Sep-06/10:08 PM
Aah, you two are so cute sometimes...

I don't see the problem with line two - the thermostat does rise of its own accord when set to, and he doesn't say 'sweats out their pores *directly because* the thermostat rises'. Thermostat goes up, temperature goes up, people get hot, people sweat. As for it being a sentence in its own right, again that's not a problem. In this context it's not a standalone sentence - starting with 'Sweats' in this case means it refers back to the previous sentence for the subject (everybody). Splitting the whole phrase into two seperate sentences removes the need for the conjuncion [and] as well as for punctuation.




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